User talk:Brook597/sandbox

Group2
Hello, Brook! Welcome to Wikipedia!Tdao 1 (talk) 16:59, 16 October 2015 (UTC)

Added sources and citations
I added 4 sources and citations to Greek sea gods. Brook597 (talk) 01:24, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

The Lead
I don't see your draft for a lead. Josef Horáček (talk) 19:29, 1 November 2015 (UTC)


 * I'm sorry to say your lead isn't good. Your language is too vague and doesn't properly explain what a death rate is or what happened with death rates in the twentieth century. Part of the problem is that the article itself isn't very good. I suggest doing the following: first of all, revise the lead using language from the article. Define clearly how a death rate is measured and say a thing or two about changing death rates and their causes in the twentieth century. Secondly, you should delete the section containing the table on highest death rate worldwide. It has nothing to do with the twentieth century. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:14, 8 November 2015 (UTC)