User talk:Bruce L. Burton/sandbox

Thanks for the input. I've acted upon the paragraph 1 and 2 suggestions but am a bit overwhelmed at what to do with the reference and don't currently have time to figure it out. I think I did it write originally but note that you only typed [1] so I don't know if all of my stuff should not be there but only down below in the reference section. I'll ask this of the trainers of the Wikipedia cohort I'm in. I think your comments on more links is also good advice and I'll try to do that before publishing this.

Regards, Bruce Burton Bruce L. Burton (talk) 20:24, 9 September 2018 (UTC)

Hi Bruce, this is JillRyeTheScienceGal. I just reviewed your "epoxy" article, and here are my comments:

Paragraph 1: 1) sentence 1 feels long. Maybe rewrite the first sentence as “ Epoxy (/ə-POCK-see/), a shortened term for "epoxy resin", can refer to either the resinous starting component(s) of an epoxy resin "formulation", or to the polymerized product. The polymerized product is typically a thermosetting plastic and is derived from starting components. Even though the polymerized, plastic material typically retains very few of the epoxide (a.k.a. oxirane) functional groups of the starting resin, it is still referred to as epoxy resin. ” 2) It will help to define and explain "formulation" and "starting components". 3) Sentence 2 is quite long and feels bumpy to read. Maybe try to reword it?

Paragraph 2: 1) I'd suggest adding some citations to this paragraph, and maybe rearranging this paragraph. - For example, "Epoxy resin systems are widely known for their useful combinations of strength, modulus, solvent resistance, corrosion resistance, and adhesion. As for many plastics, the choice to use an epoxy is often based on a combination of its processing behavior, cost-effectiveness, and the mechanical and thermal properties of the cured (cross-linked) polymer.Epoxy resins are most commonly used in coating formulations, for electrical and electronic applications (see further below), and as the matrix material for composite materials such as fiber-wound pipes, storage tanks, and air-foils. The history of epoxy resin technology is summarized in a review article[1]. (As a note of caution when using the article by Pham and Marks, the numbering is wrong in most of the reference section.)"

General suggestions: It might worth to include links to other wikipedia articles especially for these terms/topics: - resin - crosslinking - co-reactant - catalyst - polymerize - modulus - adhesion - oxirane — Preceding unsigned comment added by JillRyeTheScienceGal (talk • contribs) 20:11, 19 August 2018 (UTC)