User talk:Brunette2k16/sandbox

Inna Kachur's Peer Review
Hey Inna, since it appears that you only did your outline in your sandbox, for the peer review, I will just review and give tips on that.

LEAD SECTION
 * In your outline, the first paragraph in the abstract seems to be a great starting point. However, because it appears this is where your ideas are still being flushed out, this section of the article may more than likely have to be changed several times. So, keep adding things until of course you feel as though you have a balanced and complete amount of information; then as a suggestion, complete the body part of the article, and then edit the draft the lead section last.

STRUCTURE
 * So, this is of course just an outline of the article you plan on drafting and then creating; and obviously I don't know what your thought process is in regards to this. That said, I can imagine that it might be hard trying to come up with a structure due to the fact that this is a new article. Thus, making the structure open territory. What I would do (and suggest you do) is look at similar articles to the one you are trying to create now (like the articles of interest you and Dr. Fulton were talking about in the sandbox: "Article Sea Ice Decline", "Environmental Impact of Shipping", etc) and allow them to sculpt in your mind what you want your article's structure to be like.

Quick Note: I may be wrong as I am no expert on the arctic sea ice melt, but it appears that the impacts humans impose on the artic sea ice seem to be more indirect than direct. Meaning the things we do, are what causes the conditions which in turn lead to the arctic sea ice melting. So, if you can (and if you want to), try to make that clear as well.

Thomas997 (talk) 04:17, 28 March 2019 (UTC)

Thomas997 Thank you so much! You provided such interesting feedback. It was really helpful. I need to add more structure, you are right. Your feedback is very critically and that is why it is so helpful. Even though you state you are not an expert it is hard to say this because you do sound like one. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Brunette2k16 (talk • contribs) 19:06, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Inna Kachur's Peer Review
So far, I really like what you. I like that you will do a modern comparison to an old comparison. I like what your structure is so far. I'm sure you might have to rearrange some things, but what you have so far sounds like it'll be very informative and helpful for the reader. I like all the different subsections because I think that'll help expand and clarify your topic. Haileywriter (talk) 10:08, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Hailywiter, thank you so much for your feedback! :) You are right, I need to expand on all the sections. Your feedback was very informative and helpful. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Brunette2k16 (talk • contribs) 19:20, 3 April 2019 (UTC)