User talk:Brute55/sandbox/Sexuality in Japan

Peer Review -- Jasmaine
What you’ve written is a good start, but there isn’t a lot of content to critique.

Your structure is clear and you’ve provided a couple of good sources. The paragraphs you’ve written have a neutral tone and were easy to follow. Your paragraphs also accurately used close paraphrasing. Your formatting etiquette seems to be okay.

Instructor comments
While I fully agree with your desire to move the discussion in this article away from the subject of pornography, I'm still waiting to see how your discussions will evolve. So far I can't tell what sources you will use. At this point you should at least have been able to use the sources we have read so far (say, Pflugfelder and Furukawa) for the Tokugawa Period. If you are going to have a section on the Taisho period, Pflugfelder is good but I also can make some other recommendations. You have created a section titled "Relations," and I'm not sure what that means. What kinds of relations? Also, "gender roll" should be "gender roles". The bottom line is that what we have discussed about what you want to do with this article is good, but you haven't done much of it yet. Elyssafaison (talk) 00:40, 25 February 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review Response
First I'd like to thank everyone who managed to take a glance at what I've started to work on. I've been told not to be overwhelmed with the topic that I have chosen, however every time a topic that falls under the umbrella of "Sexuality in Japan" whether it be same sex love, tea houses/red light districts, nanshoku, or arranged marriages and so on; I'm slightly hesitant on if I should focus on those topics or just link them into the page. Furthermore, if I do focus on them, where in the structure of the article should they fall under, seeing as how many of those topics transcend the timeline I'm trying to provide to organize the information. Also this being my first class on this subject matter, all I know of it is what I learn in class. As for resources I have been able to find various documents that discuss same sex love and trans topics, but they are all written in more modern day times (1970-present day). Finding sources on heterosexual relationships and gender rolls that are accurately depicted in both the past and present Japan is proving to be troublesome. I know I have a long way to go, but your feedback on the current state of my work has been helpful. Thank you. Brute55 (talk) 04:08, 25 February 2019 (UTC)