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The Messenger: The Story of Joan of Arc
Hi Bsample88, and thanks for your interest in the article The Messenger: The Story of Joan of Arc. I've been working on this article for quite some time now. Overall i'm pleased with your contributions but I'd like to ask you a question also give you some advice for editing.

You have made several assertions, including that "The filmmakers invented the conscience to satisfy an audience aware of mental illness." In this particular case I am assuming it is the author of the book you have cited who believes the filmmakers invented the conscience for this purpose. Please inform me if your book actually quotes the filmmakers stating they did this. Accordingly I have reworded you sentence to "The book A Knight at the Movies published by Taylor & Francis stated the filmmakers invented the conscience to satisfy a modern audience that is aware of mental illness." It is important to attribute all claims and statements on wikipedia. You can't pass off one person's interpretation as an accepted fact. Accordingly I have reworded your sentence "Another theme in the movie is the inability of the church to fulfill individual spiritual needs" to "Writing in Exemplaria, Nickolas Haydock ... also considered a theme in the film to be the inability of the church to fulfill individual spiritual needs."

Please make sure your claims are always cited. I have removed your sentence "Even so, the fact that she was followed into battle speaks to the common belief that she stood for God's will. Soliders still followed her despite the moral tone she set with her troops forbidding them from looting, gambling, and swearing which is shown throughout the movie" because it was unsourced. Also avoid numbering or using bullet points unless it is unavoidable; I have reworded your 'Historical accuracy' section to remove the numbered points and instead replace it with normal paragraphs.

Whilst your referencing was good, there are two points of improvement. Avoid using the dating format 01/01/2001. Not only is this format not accepted when using the approved cite formats (see your version of the article here  and scroll down to the 'A Knight at the Movies' reference and note that the date format was not accepted). Even if this format was accepted, it is still undesirable as while the USA lists the month before the date, the rest of the planet does not. I wasn't sure whether your date "10/2/2012" was 10 February of the 2 October, so I just had to shorten it to just "2002". Please feel free to spell out the full date in the format '1 January 2001'. Also it is preferable (though not required) when citing a source that is used multiple times over multiple pages to cite the individual page number each time. Have a look at how the source "Hayward, Susan; Powrie, Phil (2009). The Films of Luc Besson: Master of Spectacle" appears in the bibliography section of the article and then appears in the notes section several times (e.g Hayward, p. 70.).

You have cited the article "Shooting the Messenger: Luc Besson at War with Joan of Arc". You don't happen to have a pdf copy of this article do you? If I gave you my email address, would you be able to send me a copy? I'd like to see if I can expand this article further with it, and I'd also to clarify some things. Thanks. Freikorp (talk) 03:58, 2 November 2014 (UTC)