User talk:Bscheib/sandbox

Lead Section
The lead section in the current article seems as though it could be expanded quite a bit, I don't see any specifically planned additions to it in your sandbox, however, I think much of the information that you are planning on adding to other parts of the article could also be summarized and added to the lead section. Perhaps a few more sentences about the subject matter of the pieces.

Clear Structure
I think that the article itself is clearly structured for the most part, although I think that the "people in the tapestries" section could be added into "composition and context", or at least moved directly below it. The writing in the article however is very dense and sometimes confusing. I think that along with the additions you are planning you will be able to greatly improve the article by cleaning up the writing and making it easier to read. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mallorynermoe (talk • contribs) 04:41, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

Neutral Content
I think that both the current content of the article and your planned additions are neutral in information, but the article currently has some issues with tone. There are some spots in the lead section as well as in composition and context where the language used skews towards opinion rather than fact and sounds rather unprofessional. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mallorynermoe (talk • contribs) 05:05, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

Planned additions and sources
I think your planned additions look great, they seem as though they will add important details to the article, but as I stated above I think some of your greatest work done on this article could be the editing to make it easier to read and more understandable for the average wikipedia viewer. I particularly like your planned additions to the organizational structure of the article, like adding subheadings. It also definitely needs more images so I'm glad to see that you are planning to add some. This article already has quite a few reliable resources so I think it is impressive that you were able to find even more. I'm looking forward to seeing what you are going to do with this article, because I think it has a lot of potential! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mallorynermoe (talk • contribs) 05:14, 12 March 2019 (UTC)