User talk:Bshy01/Grana Padano

Article draft feedback
You've added some good information and strong sources in this draft! As you continue your additions and revisions, a few things to keep in mind are:
 * Your goal isn't to completely re-word the existing material. Some of the information that appears to be deleted in your current draft is supported by the sources you're citing and/or others already in the article, and things like showing pronunciation after the first use of the article's topic and giving a succinct description of that topic are pretty standard. If you don't have a particular reason to undo previous editors' work (it's demonstrably inaccurate, or the language is unclear, or the information is irrelevant to the article, or you're correcting grammar errors, that kind of thing), I would avoid removing or unnecessarily re-wording existing work.
 * For the sections you mentioned via email you still want to add, I'm not seeing much on taste, but a quick search in the CCC library online holdings shows some articles related to the industry ("Rire-branded with confidence" and "Government cheese and Grana Padano: the global meltdown over geographical indications" both stood out to me on this front) as well as some interesting conversations around health studies (and some resulting claims) specific to Grana Padano, which I don't see represented yet in this article and could certainly be added.
 * I would be happy to have a conversation about phrasing, but would want to see your phrasing in a new/added section rather than a paraphrase or re-working of the existing Wikipedia material. If you want to either post a paragraph or section here (and then let me know it's here) or else email it to me this week, we can talk more specifically about phrasing, sentences, etc.

Let me know if you have any questions, and I look forward to reading your polished draft! Nicoleccc (talk) 20:42, 27 July 2019 (UTC)