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Contributions to an Article (Sarah Grimke) Additional Sources Women's America: Refocusing the Past, Linda K. Kerber brief and thorough summary of the life and progression of faith of the Grimke sisters "Letters on the Equality of Sexes and the Condition of Women" she rejects ideas that women should not have equal education and that women need "mental cultivation" "whatsoever it is morally right for a man to do, it is morally right for a woman to do" and it is up to women to enforce this idea in the minds of men "Pastoral Letter" excerpt that

Addition to "View on Faith and Creation" Sarah Grimke used Scripture in most of her writings, which demonstrated her dedication to the Quaker faith and her genuine belief in its compatibility with activism. In 1837, Sarah responded to a Pastoral Letter that reinforced Biblical interpretations andsupported the role of females in the "private sphere" only, using Scripture to provide the benefits and power of this position[3]. Sarah responded to this letter with Scripture, encouraging women to take on a motto of " 'The Lord is my light, and my salvation; whom shall I fear? The Lord is the strength of my life; whom shall I be afraid?' She must feel, if she feels rightly, that she is filling one of the most important duties laid upon her as an accountable being, and that her character, instead of being 'unnatural', is in exact accordance with the will of Him,"[4]. Her faith and closeness to God were a critical factor in her ability to be unafraid during times of opposition and to argue on behalf of women and slaves well.

Tschoultz (talk) 22:32, 28 November 2018 (UTC)Taylor
 * Took out "on" before "that women should not have..." Took out "that" before "it is up to women..." Finish the sentence "Pastoral Letter excerpt that..." Replaced "that" with "which" in the first sentence of your Addition section. Put a space between "private sphere only," and "using." Took out "also" before "with Scripture."
 * I bolded my changes above where I changed words. What you have written so far is good. You could possibly expand more on the letter she got and responded to. This would give the reader a better understanding of the context of the letter and why she responded to it.

PEER REVIEW BY KADEN MATHESON Additional Sources Women's America: Refocusing the Past, Linda K. Kerber 1. brief and thorough summary of the life and progression of faith of the Grimke sisters 2. "Letters on the Equality of Sexes and the Condition of Women" 3. she rejects on ideas that women should not have equal education and that women need "mental cultivation" 4. "whatsoever it is morally right for a man to do, it is morally right for a woman to do" and that it is up to women to enforce this idea in the minds of men 5. "Pastoral Letter" excerpt that

Addition to "View on Faith and Creation" Sarah Grimke used Scripture in most of her writings that demonstrated her dedication to the Quaker faith and her genuine belief in its compatibility with activism. In 1837, Sarah responded to a Pastoral Letter that reinforced Biblical interpretations which supported the role of females in the "private sphere"only, using Scripture to provide the benefits and power of this position[3]. Sarah responded to this letter also with Scripture, encouraging women to take on the motto (deleted "of") "'The Lord is my light, and my salvation; whom shall I fear? The Lord is the strength of my life; whom shall I be afraid?' She must feel, if she feels rightly, that she is filling one of the most important duties laid upon her as an accountable being, and that her character, instead of being 'unnatural', is in exact accordance with the will of Him,"[4]. Her faith and closeness to God were a critical factor in her ability to be unafraid during times of opposition and to argue skillfully on behalf of women and slaves (deleted "well").

'''Great job on your article additions, Bailey! Your wording remained neutral and objective, and I liked your sentence structure. I made a few edits having to do with word choice and minor grammatical issues (many of which may have occurred in the copy/paste process), but otherwise well done!''' Mnedak (talk) 22:35, 28 November 2018 (UTC)