User talk:Btymoniewicz/William Pickens/Samantha Velazquez Peer Review

Peer Review
Hi Brooke, I'm just going to give some overall comments instead of follow every point from the peer review outline, but so far great job on all your additions! A few things I think would be helpful for your article is to try to find a picture of your person if there is one. Also, I see Pickens has two autobiographies, but the biography section of the article is quite brief, and I see you are focusing a lot of your additions to providing descriptions of Pickens works, which is great, but I wonder if the most important information you should focus on is a biography of him. I think your sections that you did write are strong, but there are some grammar mistakes so I would just closely reread over your work. For example, these sentences: "This brings forth progress in the African government and people. Moreover, in the first few years, that African Americans in the United States has received some freedoms, they have not received the outright equality that they deserve due to their respectable contributions to American society." do not really make sense or flow to me. The first sentence feels incomplete and the tense does not seem right, is it supposed to say brought instead of brings? Maybe I am just misinterpreting things. Anyways, keep up the good work! Samantha Velazquez (talk) 16:38, 19 November 2020 (UTC)