User talk:Budd998

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Hello, Budd998, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Clarification needed on Personality in animals
Hi Budd998, I reviewed your recent contribution to personality in animals, but I think you can improve your wording to make your meaning clearer to readers. I tagged this sentence: "Chimpanzees are also the only non-human species shown to demonstrate a hierarchical structure of personality, with two dimensions of affect corresponding to negative and positive emotionality, and a third dimension of disinhibition (vs. constraint), which is thought to comprise a regulatory system that is known to play a role in the perception and interpretation of incoming stimuli." as needing clarification.

What do you mean by two dimensions of affect? Assume the reader will not be an expert on this subject, and try to help them understand the concepts you're conveying. Additionally, the sentence is really long and has a lot of content, so I believe its readability would be enhanced by breaking it up into multiple, shorter sentences. Don't forget to link to concepts that might be useful to readers; for example, you could hyperlink the word disinhibition. Thanks, Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:50, 5 October 2018 (UTC)