User talk:Bvwrigle/sandbox

Hello! When looking at this article, my first thought was that there are very few citations. I think you have done a very good job going through the existing citations to see if the information they cited was actually in that text. I also agree with you that you might want to change the title or somehow express the original name of the suit, but I do not know if referring to it as the Mao suit is offensive (it seems like it might be to me).

I definitely think the most important change is just to add citations to this article. The information appears valid at first glance, but without unbiased sources it is unreliable. I would definitely consider changing the name of the article (if you can) to either the Zhongshan suit or something similar.

Also, in the "Origins" section, the article begins to refer to Sun Yat-sen by his first name, rather than his last. I think that could be a change to make since it reads very casually. In that same section, the third paragraph is almost entirely written about political parties, instead of clothing, which is kind of awkward. I might get rid of that and just have one sentence explaining that both sides of the conflict wore this specific suit.

I am not necessarily upset about using news articles to cite specific instances when the suit was worn, it really is the fact that they are the only citations in the whole article.

Overall, if you just remove or alter a few sentences or add a citation or two the article will be much improved.

Aurgallagher (talk) 17:25, 8 March 2019 (UTC)

The comments you made on the talk page about citations are good now you should try and add the citations into the actual article or put them in your sandbox. I agree that the information on the page seems good, but you could try to find more information. The Symbol of national sovereignty sub section of the article could use more work if you want to try and improve that. You could try finding more examples of it in your research this might help to improve the section. I also think you should continue in finding sources and research for the Mao suit in todays time and then adding a new section into the wikipedia article for that.Cbkerr (talk) 16:11, 15 March 2019 (UTC)