User talk:CDoris-Bio341/sandbox

I can see how you are refining your ideas as you go move deeper into the scientific literature and figure out what you want to contribute. Your notes on the science papers are a good start. It is hard to see how you will weave them into the comments that you want to add because your outline does really have structure yet. Keep working on turning your sources into regular citations with clear descriptions of the science as it contributed to the topic you are explaining. Also remember to regular link to other wikipedia articles if there are topics that relate to what you are writing about. Lethornton (talk) 01:01, 17 March 2018 (UTC)

Draft Review
The intro paragraph is written great, as it is a strong starting point to the problems associated with pollinator decline and the harm that can come from it for so many species of plants. I would recommend, for the second paragraph, that if possible maybe delve a little bit into the many types of reasons you put for pollination decline (pesticide, climate change etc.), and potentially starting a new paragraph once you delve into your first example (butterflies). Although there are separate wikipedia articles written for those reasons, it might be beneficial to put a small definition of them in your paragraph as well. If possible, find areas that you can expand on in your last paragraph, such as species that can skirt around pollination and other long-term effects. Really well written article though, it was very informative.Anuragpolk (talk) 23:57, 27 March 2018 (UTC)

Instructor Comments: Your pollinator article has shaped up really well. I see that you have made revisions and added more detail. You have done a good job expanding on what was already in the pollination section and giving concrete examples. It does not seem that you have quite gotten to the expected amount of scientific content for the assignment. You have a lot of additional sources, and maybe there is more that will help you expand on studies that are being done on colony collapse and the impact on fruit production. It is time to start figuring out how to merge your work onto the main page.

Also, I see that you have started your next project. Be careful that your references do not get mixed in. It might be better to creat a new sandbox for the fruit project to keep your work separated. Lethornton (talk) 21:12, 11 April 2018 (UTC)