User talk:CJWilliams1/sandbox

- The opening paragraph introduces the person along with a few facts/stats which ends up creating an odd feeling as to why those accolades are there while others are not. I feel the paragraph could use a reworking in order to make it more effective. (comes off as a bit out of date)

- The "Early Life" section leaves a lot to be desired. It could use substantially more information.

- The "High School Career" section is full of clunky sentences that could use reworking.

- The "College Career" section includes the term "hard fought," that, in my humble opinion, should be removed. - The "College Career" section the sentences that describe Elliott declaring for the NFL draft seem to rely on the author's insight and understanding of the situation.

- The first section in "Professional Career" could use rewording or order to avoid hinting at bias.

- His six game suspension and the details of the situation are mentioned, but to do the gravity of the situation and just how large of a spectacle it was I feel the scandal(or lack thereof) deserves it's own section. In fact it takes up his entire "2017 Season" section, and despite how much it hung over that season it did not encompass it all.

CJWilliams1 (talk) 02:48, 6 February 2019 (UTC)