User talk:Cab3840J/Graffiti:Ohio University

Werner3840J (talk) 16:30, 1 November 2012 (UTC) In the introduction, possibly write "Graffiti:Ohio University" in bold (as opposed to only "Graffiti"). Also, introduction has some grammatical mistakes (commas, wording, etc.). But, introduction is clear. As a reader, I know what the article will entail.

"The Wall": Some grammar mistakes: "...can make their mark, worry-free" "It also takes approximately two gallons.." Check sentence structure and tense, as well. Make a seperate category named "External Links" to place the pictures and the youtube videos? Cite where you got the photos in the "References", as well as the information you gathered about the history of the Graffiti Wall.

"Off the Wall": Include Facebook page in "External Links", as well. Don't make a link to the Graffiti Wikipedia page, provide it as a source in "External Links". But, I love that you included information about Graffiti styles with photos that offers examples of the styles! Great idea!

"Seigfreid Hall": Place link in "External links", as well. Maybe add more information on Professor Eldridge?

CBoring3840J (talk) 16:49, 1 November 2012 (UTC) In you introduction I noticed some grammatical mistakes, such as no commas before but and some spacing issues between words. The introduction is clear upon the idea of which you are going to be talking about.

The Wall: In this section i noticed some grammar mistakes. ...can make their mark, worry-free. approximate should become approximately. Maybe create a separate section for the links of the videos and pictures.

Off the wall: Great use of examples for the styles of graffiti.

Seigfreid Hall: Maybe try to find more information on Professor Eldridge ?

Interesting to learn about the history of graffiti on our campus! Great topic of choice!