User talk:Caitlindutch/sandbox

Hi, overall, I think you are off to a pretty good start. It seems like you have a good source to pull information from. However, I think that you should work on the tone in which you are writing. It is not quite as the "neutral wikipedia tone" that the article should be written in. Also, it might be better to "overcite" than to "undercite". You have a lot of good facts in your edits, but make sure to cite after each one. For example, in the very first sentence, maybe add a citation to where you got that information from so that the reader can quickly access that specific fact. (that social media is being universally used to allow for people to connect). Also, maybe try re-wording "However, when people share their opinions and thoughts on social media their own personal footprint and rhetoric can be observed for better or for worse."-- it seems like you may be stating your own opinion / original research. I think that by re-wording this sentence and adding a source at the end of it would resolve this issue!

Finally, you have an interesting point about the "Here Comes Honey Boo Boo". I think it would be useful to maybe add its own section as an example, where you can maybe try to find another one similar to it.

Perhaps finding more than the one source that you've cited will greatly help you to keep going! Good job so far! (Anyadavi (talk) 16:39, 19 April 2018 (UTC)).