User talk:Caitlinpretzel/C’s Intersectionality and Closeting Communication, LGBTQ+ Intersectionality and Feminism, and QTPOC Intersectional Communication

A's Peer Review for C
C you did a good job at introducing your topic. All of the information you presented is relevant to your topic. Your writing remained neutral. Your citations are good and all of your links work. Like I mentioned in the bibliography peer review if you remove the month from the dates in your cites it should remove the red writing in your sources. You had a strong lead sentence  that fits well into your overall section. I noticed that you used the word often several times in your writing and that is a word to watch for on Wikipedia. Often can lead to assumptions and that may impact the notability of the class Wikipedia page. You did great at keeping your information short and only including important information. You avoided using jargon and inserting your opinions on the topic. You did a good job at not focusing too much on one source and did not mention the research titles you only mentioned the topic name. You used the correct number of sources in your writing and cited them correctly. You also used the cite button an appropriate amount of times and did not write too much between cites. A.B.highland (talk) 18:10, 12 April 2024 (UTC)


 * Hey A, thank you for your feedback. I did not realize that one of my sources is not a communication source, so I will look for a replacement article for the intersectionality and feminism paragraph. I will also be sure to double check my writing for words to watch and fix the red text in my sources. Caitlinpretzel (talk) 17:52, 16 April 2024 (UTC)

Dr. E's Review
Great start, C! Your jargon will need to be unpacked like heteronormativity and more specifics like what do you mean by violence. See my Canvas feedback for more info. OsaRosa (talk) 06:36, 16 April 2024 (UTC)


 * Hey Dr. E, thank you for your feedback! I will better explain heteronormativity by relooking at my articles so I can source what it means. I will also expand on what I mean by violence by relooking at my article for examples. For my third source, your article, I will expand on how closeting does not just apply to sexuality but also gender. Caitlinpretzel (talk) 17:58, 16 April 2024 (UTC)

Closeting Communication feedback
Hi @Caitlinpretzel, You're on the right path! I think Dr. E's feedback is helpful. it's always helpful to think about the reader, right? You want to be intentional with your word choice, so that makes it easier for the readers to understand what you mean, like the word 'violence'. How does heteronormativity explain what you say it does?

Also I suggest checking out pg. 8 of this PDF, for examples of clear, encyclopedic writing. I think it might be helpful to look at and apply the style to your draft content. Brianda (Wiki Ed) (talk) 23:45, 19 April 2024 (UTC)