User talk:CalYael11/sandbox

The first thing I did was relate back to myself when I saw that his topic was Women and Christianity. I connected it to myself because growing up, I saw my mom and my grandmother going to church every Sunday morning. His article then talks about women's role in Christianity and I think that is a major part of the history of Christianity. I also had a question though. What is the women's role in Christianity? Also, what is Christianity's role for Women? How do the two connect? I also liked the quotes that Yael put into his article because it gave me more insight on what he was saying and it told me where I could find more information if needed.

Feedback on draft
Yael: I agree with Shamauri. This is a strong start, and you've chosen good quotations from your articles. Make sure that you think about how this fits into Women & Christianity - move back one step further from your sources, and think about how you can summarize what they tell us about Women & Christianity (Shamauri's questions will be helpful there.) Also, think about breaking this paragraph up. Paragraphs are usually quite short on Wikipedia, and you will be able to create stronger organization if you do that. Mbrzycki (talk) 22:52, 25 March 2019 (UTC)