User talk:Caleb26/Stockholm

3/20/2018 Evaluation by username
Overall Comments
 * Points: 0/40
 * Grade: 0%

Spelling/Grammar
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Language
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Organization
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Coding
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Validity
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Completion
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Relevance
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3/20/2018 Evaluation by Ctardif5

 * Points: 41/40
 * Grade: 102.5%

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly Meets Standard No problems exist with spelling. I did, however, notice multiple places where grammatical improvements would improve the fluidity of the edit and likely lead to a better grade. For instance, the first sentence of the first paragraph should have a comma after "2004". The following sentence is lengthy and requires additional commas to give mental pauses/exhales to improve flow and separate non-related ideas. From my education in grammar, I would place a comma after "2001", would replace the semicolon with a comma, and a comma after "generation", since you are using two phrases one after another as adjectives to describe the residents. For example, if I was going to describe a basketball, I would say "the large, orange ball" with the comma in place to indicate two unique traits of the basketball. Please let me know if this does not make sense. Many of the longer sentences throughout the edit also have structures that would improve with commas, but I will not identify every one and deprive you of the experience of self-review.

Language
Meets Standard Use of language is mostly adequate and in appropriate, encyclopedic tone. There are some places where different wording or additional details could be added to improve quality. The first sentence of the edit does not indicate the "whole" (Sweden) that this 31.5% is a part of, leading to some amount of confusion to the reader. I would read through the edit again and consider where minor word changes could make it sound more like the content already on the Stockholm page. For instance, the sentence regarding immigrant employment could be rearranged in order to flow better. For example, it could read "immigrants have careers in various industries such as healthcare, customer service, and mechanics, while others are self-employed.", but of course with accurate content.

Organization
Meets Standard Organization is straightforward and easy to understand, but I would double check the font of your headers, as they seem to have noticeable variations in size.

Coding
Exceeds Standard No code errors identified.

Validity
Meets Standard No invalid information is present, from what I have gathered, and all information seems to come from credible sources.

Completion
"Exceeds Standard" Completely satisfies the minimum requirements of the assignment (number of sources and length). No sections seem incomplete in themselves and all have an adequate amount of information.

Relevance
Meets Standard All information is relevant to the associated sub-header, but it is unclear under what topic or header on the Stockholm page that all of these sections will be added. It may be helpful to add a "Title" in the Wikipedia editor so that it is clear what overarching topic the content relates to (i.e. economics, culture, etc).

3/20/2018 Evaluation by Bportis
Overall Comments Great job on this Caleb, it is clear how much work you put into this!


 * Points: 40/40
 * Grade: 100%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard In the sentence that says "The local municipalities are in charge of deciding if they will accept refugees and if so the number." I'd consider changing it to say something along the lines of "The local municipalities are in charge of whether or not refuges will be accepted and how many are accepted." But I think your way works as well. In the sentence "Often immigrants find themselves working in areas such as the healthcare sector, working other lower paying jobs or being self-employed." I believe there should be a comma after jobs.

Language
Meets standard Great encyclopedic tone and diction, no informal language.

Organization
Meets standard. Organized well with good paragraphs and headers. Good job!

Coding
Meets standard. Great coding, although you could add links to the Sweden page throughout your paragraphs.

Validity
Meets standard. Solid information, and very illuminating! Great job.

Completion
Meets standard. Very close to complete after adding a bit more coding and possibly changing grammar a bit.

Relevance
Meets standard. No irrelevant content found. Everything checks out!