User talk:Calhoun92/sandbox

Nicole article draft feedback
Hi, Steven!

There is some solid material in this draft! The range and number of sources, and your consistent use of them throughout this draft, is particularly strong. As you continue working on this, here are some things to consider:
 * How do you plan to integrate this material into the already-existing article? Some of it looks like information that is already addressed in the article, so I'm curious where you see these additions fitting when you start moving them to the main article. I would recommend taking a look at the rubric posted in Moodle so you can see how the final article will be graded--for the final version, you will want to make sure you're addressing gaps you see in the article.
 * As you revise, moving toward a more encyclopedic tone--neutral rather than conversational, informational rather than making outside connections, and third person rather than first or second ("you" pronouns in particular jump out to me here)--will be a valuable shift
 * Wikipedia entries don't tend to include links to other articles or videos in their middles. These might be able to be linked, if appropriate, in the "outside links" section at the very bottom of the entry.
 * What else do you plan to add? What sections are you still seeing in this article that need improving or expansion, or what sections should be here that aren't here at all yet?

I hope these notes are helpful, and I look forward to reading the final version of this! Nicoleccc (talk) 20:12, 18 February 2019 (UTC)