User talk:Calum G Fraser/sandbox

Could you please peer-review at least the following two drafts: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Melanie_Abbott and https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AlaynaPaige/sandbox (this one to be expanded soon) Dwebsterbu (talk)

The article is coming along, but it needs some work in a few areas, I think. One thing is having an introduction section moved before the table of contents. THe article also needs citations and expansions on the sections you have. I would also consider merging some sections into the background one for simplicity of reading as well as avoiding unnecessary divisions in the article. It's also worth noting that you spend a lot of time discussing the background and buildup to the truth commission, but don't really spend much time talking about the commission itself; I think you should expand the discussion on the commission. Nchlumecky (talk) 01:38, 8 November 2013 (UTC)