User talk:CamME355

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Hello, CamME355, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Really nice work on your draft article. One thing that could be improved in the opening sentence of the article. While it currently starts out as

the norm for Wikipedia articles is to start out by saying what the topic is. In other words, say something like before going on explain why it's important.

Most people who look at a Wikipedia article don't read very far into it. They want to find out, quickly, what this term means. Quick and to the point. People who are more interested (or whose attention you caught with the first few words) keep reading. If they don't get what they want right away, their odds of reading on goes down. In addition, when other Wikipedians see an article, they expect it to a look a certain way. If it doesn't have the look of an article, they may tag it for its unencyclopaedic style. And tags, even when undeserved, hurt the credibility of an article.

It would be really helpful if you could make these minor tweaks. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:46, 7 March 2016 (UTC)