User talk:Camrynkeller/Electric Eel

Peer review

First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way? - I really liked the way you explained the calmodulin protein and talked about its varying presence in the different electric organs. What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement? - I would suggest that you reframe the second sentence, it is too long and has way too many commas. This would help the reader to be able to digest the information easier. What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article? - The best thing you could do to improve this article is to add to the differences in the three organs and explain each of the three organs. Right now the addition to the article starts with the physiological differences between the three electric organs but only mentions the Hunter and Sach organs. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know! - I liked the introductory sentence in the article addition. My article on salmon could use an into sentence to let the reader know what is coming.

Amberdesse (talk) 23:01, 12 October 2020 (UTC)amberdesse