User talk:Camsara99/New sandbox

All the added information relates to the article and gives more depth to the subject, the information has expanded to better explain the topic and it fits well with the other information given. The edited information better represents the view points where the article had been lacking or underrepresenting.

The article stayed neutral, no claims but could more be added to why not much else in known about marriage in ancient Greece outside of the Spartans and Athenians, but even without expanding on that it is a good point to make and does not take away from the article. Only one other thing that could possibly be added to or edited is the Dates section (maybe what the superstition was that lead people to believe thay married on a full moon), compared to the rest of the article it looks like more could be added, but overall everything looks great.

There are no bias's that I can see, it is all informative and stays on topic.

All the citation look good as well, uptodate and they work.

RachelKWalsh (talk) 20:41, 3 November 2019 (UTC)RachelKWalsh

Instructor Feedback
Thank you for your review, RachelKWalsh, and for the suggestions for improvement.

Camsara99 You've done a great amount of work on your article already, and your writing style is very straightforward and clear - this makes for a hard article to review, because it's so well done. Your reviewer makes a couple good suggestions in terms of adding content: why our sources are so biased towards Athenian and Spartan marriage, further information about dates, and expanding on the full moon superstition. Once you are done with that, keep adding content to the page - I know you have big plans for this page, so I don't want to step on your toes, but a few areas for improvement are adding chronological subsections (i.e. what do we know about marriage in ancient Greece in different periods, based on different authors) and the archaeological/art historical component (i.e. what do vase paintings, grave stelae, domestic contexts tell us about marriage). You will definitely be able to add a lot of photos to this page which will improve it significantly. Keep up the good work and just keep writing! Please let me know if you have any questions, and reply to this comment when you have seen it with your plans and goals for improvement over the next month. Don't forget to tag me and sign with 4 tildes (~)! Gardneca (talk) 19:42, 6 November 2019 (UTC)

Response to Feedback
Hello Dr.Gardner!

Thank you and Rachel as well for the feedback, it's very helpful! I hope to find more sources to expand my sections. I'd also like to add a section if possible about bias of sources and why we only really have knowledge of Athens and Sparta, but I'll have to find a source explaining this first. I also can't wait to add some interesting images with the help of some sources suggested by Dr.Gardner. Thanks again for all the support and feedback!

Cameron Smith Camsara99 (talk) 18:26, 11 November 2019 (UTC)

Sounds great, Camsara99, I'm really looking forward to seeing your final product! Gardneca (talk) 19:19, 11 November 2019 (UTC)