User talk:Candacesoto/sandbox

Peer Edit from Emily Murphy
Hi Candace! I read your draft and found that you do have a lot of interesting information. The first sentence does state the topic of the article and leads into what you will be talking about, which is helpful as a reader! However, I would make sure that you separate the information you found into different paragraphs with headings to organize it into something other than just one chunk of information. I also found that you need to make sure you cite where the information/research came from, I don't think I saw any cites after the sentences, however, the information is very good and informing. I also think you could add more information still as the article seemed to be a little short and left me wanting to know more things about the topic. I think that you could maybe go into more history or relevance today just to add more information that can allow people to know more about it. Therefore, I think you should focus on organizing the information with headings, adding citations after each sentence you found from online or research, and adding more information to make sure people reading can leave with a clear vision of the topic. Good Work so far!

Taylor Johnson Peer Review
I honestly found your entire edit was really great. I didn't previously know anything about Pan-Asian American women so when you compared this classification to the Anglo-Saxton idea of nonintentional racism it made it much easier for me to make the connection with where your article goes. Also, mentioning the beginnings of the Pan-Asian American Woman Organization was really great. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Tcwgswiki (talk • contribs) 16:14, 18 April 2018 (UTC)