User talk:Cannondale0702

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Hey there, I'm Cryptic C62 (or Ryan, if you prefer human names), one of the Online Ambassadors. I've read through what you have in your sandbox on Obesity in the Arab World, and I have some feedback for how you can improve further:


 * Consider creating a table to concisely summarize or (possibly replace) the information in Section 3: "Obesity in the Arab World". The headers of such a table would probably be something like "Country", "Overweight %", "Obesity %", "Year", "Reference". A table like this would allow you to consolidate a lot of the text.
 * Start filling in the footnotes with more detailed citations so other users can verify the information. Because you have so many sources listed, this will probably be a very tedious process, so I highly recommend spacing it out over time. Be sure to check out our citation templates.
 * Add some more wikilinks to help the reader find relevant information. See this edit I did for an example.
 * I ran a search for both "Islam" and "Muslim" and I was surprised to find that there are no uses of either word in the entire article. Considering how prominent Islam is within the Arab world, surely the religious authorities must have said something about obesity that could be used here, right? A google search for "islam obesity" returns over 700,000 results, so some of that should surely be usable material.

Let me know if you have any questions. --Cryptic C62 · Talk 04:21, 23 October 2010 (UTC)

Article title
Hi. Your article, Obesity in the Middle East and North Africa, is a candidate to be featured briefly on the main page as part of Did you know?. As you noted on Talk:Obesity in the Middle East and North Africa, you did not use the term "Arab world" in the article title because the article includes Iran and does not include some Arab regions. However, at T:TDYK, another contributor pointed out that Israel is clearly part of the geographic region (and I note that it is very likely to have good data), but is not included in the article. To clarify the article scope, I have suggested the title Obesity in Islamic areas of the Middle East and North Africa. Since you clearly have some knowledge of the region, I wonder if you have thoughts on the best way to label it. --Orlady (talk) 03:11, 5 November 2010 (UTC)

DYK for Obesity in the Middle East and North Africa
Orlady (talk) 18:03, 7 November 2010 (UTC)