User talk:Capejoani/sandbox

Notes for Peer Review from Emiliepichot (talk) 17:38, 26 November 2018 (UTC) This looks great! Significant contributions to the information there, more citations, and a whole new section. You improved the flow of the text and included more details. The photo of the pin is also a good addition!

-Consider adding internal links (even if they don't exist and come up red) for the following: chronic bronchitis, asthma, Colorado Springs, Alice Paul (internal link not included in one section), Gladys Grenier, Gertrude Crocker -add more categories, if possible! -consider adding an external links & further reading section, if possible -make sure she is linked in other pages like the "List of Suffragists and Suffragettes" -consider changing this phrasing: "the destination was the White House" -if possible, add more info as to why the suffragettes repeated words of Wilson at Lafayette's Tomb -if possible, include more info on "Watchfires" (what were they and what was their purpose?) with an internal or red link -add a heading for the citations section -will the title next to her name be Suffragette or Suffragist? -still include the quote in the original version — Preceding unsigned comment added by Emiliepichot (talk • contribs) 17:46, 26 November 2018 (UTC)


 * Thank you for your comments and suggestions, Emilie. I have added some more internal links. I had intended to keep that quote from the original article; I just transferred those areas that I was editing, so had not included that in my sandbox. You have made some great suggestions for further edits; in particular, I would like to do more on the Watchfires.

Capejoani (talk) 19:49, 26 November 2018 (UTC)

Capejoani your edits look great! I think Emiliepichot covered most of what I was thinking. I would recommend following Wiki formatting for headings: Capitalize first letter of the first word subsequent words are lower case: Early life, Education and career, Personal life, Later years, etc. Keep up the good work! Tillyaceous (talk) 18:23, 27 November 2018 (UTC)
 * Thanks, Tillyaceous! Missed the capitalization in the heading; just fixed it. Capejoani (talk) 19:20, 27 November 2018 (UTC)