User talk:Carali0128/Wintu

Feedback from Dr. Hyde
'''You’re getting a good start here. The parts you plan to add will be important additions to the piece. The key tasks  now are finishing the sections on the massacres (ugh) and laying in citations that are newer and fuller.'''

1)    Lay out the structure of your article or the new chunks of an old article with an Introduction and titles for the parts you want to add or rewrite

'''The section that is called “History” now, probably needs to be retitled to reflect your additions. Maybe “European Encounters and Genocide” ? You can link to other Wikipedia articles for  some of the details here. The parts about what actually happened are easier to add in, but watch out about getting stuck in too much detail there. Then maybe you need a separate section about “Wintu Survival” to explain how the story evolved more recently.'''

2) Added new, high-quality sources (books, articles, authoritative websites)

'''As you add citations to the paragraphs here, use some of the excellent histories that have been written about this. Start with Ben Madley, American Genocide, 2016 which OU has online and on the shelf. Another good book is Brendan Lindsay, Murder State : California's Native American Genocide, 1846-1873  Lincoln: University of Nebraska Press, 2012.Their indexes will help you find stuff about the Wintu specifically. '''

3)Written 50-60% of what you hope to add

'''A little thin but, I can see where you are going and that parts you hope to fill in. At some point, you might have to decide to focus on finishing several sections rather than working on fixing the whole article. You can leave some work other people to do later.'''

4) Thinking about linking as opposed to creating too much background

Here is where you might need to consider how much background people can get from other Wikipedia articles about other battles, Texas adventurers, and early Texas History.

5) Started to clean up a few paragraphs

'''You can decide whether you want to do this on the mainspace or in your sandbox, but the clean up and fixing spelling and writing errors takes a while. Another next step is adding some maps and images.'''

GRADE FOR DRAFT (POINTS) : 70/80 Afh1858 (talk) 17:35, 11 November 2023 (UTC)


 * In my final Wikipedia page I incorporated my research into the current information on the page. I added new sources and sited them on the site. On the page I thought it would be good to see how the tribe is currently doing so I added information about how and what they were doing in the present day. There is a picture that represents what the tribe looks like in current time next to this specific topic. I made sure that when I incorporated my information that it flowed with the information already on the page. Thank you! Carali0128 (talk) 03:43, 12 December 2023 (UTC)