User talk:Carbohydrate Fatty acid/sandbox

Hello,

Hydrosphere seems like a good topic!

Peer Review
Hi there! Great ideas so far for the additions to the hydrosphere article. I think it was a really good idea including human impacts as another section of the article. I think the lead section could be shortened, and the information presented near the end could possibly be incorporated into another section. Some other ideas you could maybe look into to add onto the article could include how different feedback loops affect the hydrosphere, or how climate change is impacting it/projections for the future. It looks like the info you’re going to be adding is coming from reliable sources, and is neutral in tone. Great job so far!! Nramberg (talk) 16:51, 9 March 2019 (UTC)

Andrewlin1 Peer Review
The draft for this article confused me a bit. Much of the information currently in the draft is simply cut and paste from the current article itself while also omitting large sections of information from the original article. I think the information that was provided was objective, with good sources to back them up as well as a neutral tone. I think the newly added "Human effects" was a good idea as humans have had a large impact on the hydrosphere, and giving a reader a basic understanding would likely be beneficial. Despite this, the section is organized as a numbered list, with sparse information provided. Overall, I think this article draft has a good starting point but needs more information to be added. Keep up the editing! Andrewlin1 (talk) 04:18, 23 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review
This is a really great first draft and you seem to really have a lot of good information here. The way that you linked to other Wikipedia pages was very effective, and the way that this was formatted made this very easy to follow and understand. Aside from a couple of minor grammar errors, I think this is really well done. Here are a few that I found:

- In the first line under Human Effects, “…directly introduced substance”

- In the third last sentence under Water Cycle, “Transpiration refers to the expiration of water…”

- Under Human effects, bullet 1 and 2, I think you should change “lead” to “leads”

Just moving forward I wonder if your article can benefit from maybe adding a bullet about the effects of climate change or even pollution on the water cycle. For example sulphur dioxide in the atmosphere leads to acid rain, and I am curious how this would potentially impact the cycle. It may be interesting to look into. Otherwise really great job on this! Kthay1197 (talk) 12:26, 23 March 2019 (UTC)