User talk:Carissa12aud/sandbox


 * The article is long and detailed, many sources are used and it tries to give readers as much information as possible. However, some information is over detailed and some has little evidence to be backed.
 * First sentence in the second paragraph is a run on sentence.
 * Monaural should be changed to a more laymen's term such as unilateral or one-sided
 * The section "Among musicians" is not necessary because it already stated that they are a higher risk for NIHL. It is not necessary to pick this one occupation and explain why it may cause NIHL. Or just shorten that section and mention briefly the risks musicians have for NIHL.
 * "Sporting events" section could also be summarized and not so detailed.
 * Under "Prevention" the last sentence in the first paragraph is incomplete.
 * Could add links to earplug and earmuff wiki pages in the "Prevention" section.
 * "Medication" section should not claim ideas that are still being studied. This section could say something such as "medications are still being researched to determine if they can prevent NIHL."
 * Corrections proposed by the author are good and relevant.