User talk:CarolFFF

Welcome!
Hello, CarolFFF, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Employment
How the Warlpiri people are employed and work with the Australian economy.

Warlpiri people
Hi! I wanted to reach out to you about the text in this article. I have the following notes:


 * Avoid making point of view statements, as these will be subjective to the reader. Not only does this presume something of the reader, but someone could disagree entirely with what was written. It also makes things seem like it's a reaction to the sourcing as opposed to a summary of the content.


 * To expand on the prior point, avoid making generalized, sweeping statements about a topic, especially in Wikipedia's voice. If you're pulling this from the source then it's important that it's attributed to the person making the claim. For example, the statement "The world fails to realize that the Warlpiri people are civilized and progressive, widows are not forced to remarry and are a very important part of the society which is a common misconception" is very generalized, so much so that it's almost certainly incorrect since it would mean that even you, I, and the person who wrote the source still holds these misconceptions. It's better to write something like "Francoise Dussart has stated that there are many common misconceptions about the Warlpiri people...". However the catch here is that this should be something that is covered enough in sources to where it would be worth mentioning in the article.

I hope this helps! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:53, 22 November 2019 (UTC)