User talk:CarolineHeyman/sandbox

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I'm an online ambassador for your WMST 250: Women, Art, and Culture (2014 Q3) class and have just stopped by to provide a quick review and add what I hope will be helpful comments.

You've done great work on your article about Bonnie Ora Sherk, particularly on her career and three important works.

Some suggestions are:
 * There's no information about her background or education. Per her ISNI record, she was born in 1940. It would be good to have some background information. You may want to check out Anita Berrizbeitia which has a short background section.
 * It's usual to have the year of birth following the subject's name in the introduction.
 * I haven't been quite sure what of the sections are titles versus place names - so I took a stab. It seems like Public Lunch is a work of art, so I put it in italics, and the other two are places, and don't need quotes or italics. If I'm wrong, though, please make the adjustment.
 * Two of the citations are incomplete. At a minimum, citations usually have a title, publisher, and if applicable: author, location, year/date, accessdate and url if there's a website.

I'll check in on you again, and I'll be watching this page if you have any questions or comments.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 03:51, 1 November 2014 (UTC)