User talk:Carolinefortune/Vapor intrusion

Peer Review
The lead is concise and informative, and tells exactly what the article will be about. However, there are some parts that might be unclear to readers, such as what “Volatile Organic Compounds” and “indoor air” are. To make it a little more clear, I would add a link to the Wikipedia articles on VOCs. Overall, it does reflect the most important information and seems to give an even weight to all the important parts of the article. Nothing seems missing or redundant.

The sections are organized well between causes and the process, and then the concerns and mitigation. However, it is a little hard to distinguish between the different sections because the entire article is in bold, so to fix it I would un-bold the body text. In addition, I like the order of the sections, it makes sense and is easy to understand. It also does not have a “see also” section, so I would include that too.

Each section appears equal in length which is good, and no sections that seem unnecessary or off topic. The article does reflect the different perspectives/aspects of vapor intrusion and does not draw any conclusions or try to convince the reader of a single point of view. It is informative and well balanced.

The article looks neutral in tone and does not seem biased anywhere, so I could not guess the perspective of the author. I do not see any phrases or words that do not feel neutral.

There is only one citation in the article, a citation to a document written by the EPA, which is a reliable source. In addition, there is a link to a journal article in the references section but I do not see a link to it anywhere in the draft, so I would add that in there. Overall, the two sources used are reliable and unbiased. However, to make it even better I would incorporate more than two articles in order to get the most point of views possible. Some sentences do not have a source on them that look like they might need sources in both the causes and process section, as well as the concerns and mitigation section.

~ Clairer744 (talk) 16:29, 16 November 2023 (UTC)