User talk:Carson277/sandbox

Feedback from Arslan Khayrullin
Your article seems to be very developed and well-structured. It is an interesting topic because it is often not discussed in the early history of the Soviet Union. However, bringing more attention to it is beneficial for learning more about history. Below, I will include some bullet points about certain aspects on which you could improve on.

To answer some of your questions: "Something I am wondering is whether it should be a broad analysis of Black people in the Soviet Union" - Yes, I believe it is appropriate to include Black people from all over the world, not necessarily America. A big portion of this is how Communism handles the acceptance of Black people in comparison to others (ex: capitalism).

I would recommend to improve on the following points: --Arslan2607 (talk) 05:31, 25 October 2020 (UTC)
 * This is minor, but link more names and important events/official titles to other Wikipedia pages (ex: link '2nd Communist International' to '2nd World Congress of the Comintern' if appropriate).
 * Add more context to the counter-point of your main story regarding those who weren't in agreement with Lenin's approach.
 * Consider potentially talking about the experience of African-Americans in present-day Russia (significantly different).
 * Dive into the core concepts of communism and why exactly it accepted people of color better than capitalism.
 * Talk about America's reaction to Soviet Union's acceptance of people of color.
 * Add some statistical numbers in regard to the amount of people of color who came to the Soviet Union

Feedback from Robby Hinderliter:
The article is very concise and features relevant information from a good group of primary and secondary sources. I also like that it covers one of Wikipedia's equity gaps by elaborating on the experience of African Americans within the Soviet Union, a topic that is often not covered. The topic is very interesting and I think it is something that people would like to read about. Regarding your questions, I think you could make this part of the Afro-Russians Wikipedia page because I do not think there is enough for it to stand as its own page. I also think it should be a broad analysis of Black people in the Soviet Union because this is a topic that has not been covered enough and is actually very interesting when contrasted with the experiences of those in Europe and America.

I think you should add more headings to give the article more structure, and I also think you should elaborate on the views of those who disagreed with the proposed Theses on the Negro Question. I also think it might be good to elaborate on what the aftermath of the Theses actually looked like and whether the Soviets took action or just published something for show like the Americans.