User talk:Casademasa/sandbox

Peer review of draft:

Overall a good structure and draft for the Wikipedia article that provides a general overview of surveillance protesting. The lead section gives a good general outline of the definition of surveillance protesting.The second section that details the context of surveillance protesting flow naturally from its definition and gives the reader important details on its general history. I think it could be helpful to provide in the lead section more information on what to expect for the rest of the article and an outline for what is to be expected. Also, it may be helpful to also include more information on surveillance protesting in other regions of the world because at the moment it gives a good representation of what surveillance protesting is like in the United States. It might be helpful to also have international context on what is happening in other regions. I also found it helpful to have different sections for each different political movement because it makes the article easy to read and draws attention to each specific event. I think this topic is really interesting and I'm looking forward to learning more! Thisismyusername31 (talk) 14:07, 8 April 2021 (UTC)

Peer Review Week 9
Hi,

This is a really engaging topic and was interesting to read more this week about other surveillance protest movements. I think the lead sections gives a good idea for the reader of what to expect, but I think it could be broken down into two paragraphs to make it a bit easier to read? I think the definition given right after the lead section and the context is really helpful to have when reading about the rest of the movements in the article. I think that it could even be expanded because it gives the reader a good background of what surveillance protests are and it's history. I also liked how you incorporated other surveillance protests from around the world and in Europe. I'm curious to know if similar protests have occurred in Asian/ Latin American countries? I think the structure of the article is good as well.

Thisismyusername31 (talk) 04:13, 18 April 2021 (UTC)