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Reflection Over Wikipedia Article:

Critiquing articles: I have learned a lot about Wikipedia from editing and adding to my article. I have learned to use language that is neutral and that (especially for Wikipedia) it is very important to stay away from opinionated language that attempts to persuade readers to adopt a particular viewpoint. Originally, I was going to do work on the "gente de razon" article, but after I conducted more research and explored the topic of pearl hunting, I decided to switch and edit that topic, especially since the pearl diving article on Wikipedia only covered pearl hunting in relation to Japan and Asian countries. It was very simple to decide what to add because pearl hunting was a major component of the Spanish economic market in the 16th century. The topic related well to both the class and course material and finding sources was not difficult.

Summarizing your contributions: I edited a subheading of the article that originally read "history" to "historical overview." That way, the article did not focus so heavily on the history of Japan pearl diving but rather gave a good summary of that topic in relation to a larger historical narrative. I also added several paragraphs about pearl hunting in colonial Latin America, specifically in Venezuela and Panama. With my additions, I believe the article is much more informative and diverse, since pearl diving did not just occur in Asian countries. I believe my edits also add reputable sources so that readers can access valid sources should they want to read about pearl diving in colonial Latin America some more.

Peer Review: I really enjoyed the peer review process and gave advice to Elizabeth on how to better her article. I made sure to point out grammar, vocabulary, wording, and tonal issues that I saw in her first draft, but overall, her material was quite good and very informative. Elizabeth recommended that I fix simple grammar and vocabulary mistakes, as well as add another section on pearl diving if it was highly popular anywhere else in colonial Latin America. I took her advice and made the appropriate edits, as well as lengthened what I wrote on Panama and Margarita Island and added a section in about Cubagua.

Feedback: I received feedback from both my teachers and my peers about my Wikipedia article. Their advice was very helpful.

Wikipedia generally: Wikipedia was very different from creating and editing articles that I have worked on in the past. I have largely done work that requires me to present an argument and persuade an audience as to why my argument is correct, but as stated before, persuasion is not a goal of Wikipedia article editing. I also better understand how Wikipedia is monitored, edited, and corrected by thousands of Wikipedia users who work collaboratively on projects and articles to ensure that the content is "encyclopedic" enough. I appreciate our class doing this assignment and am happy to have contributed to a greater body of knowledge about pearl hunting and colonial Latin America in general. CaseyDuke (talk) 04:06, 13 November 2017 (UTC)

'''Peer Review ''' By Elizabeth Barahona In the Intro- It would be best to summarize what pearl hunting is. The article is on the act itself and your introduction speaks more to the how pearl hunting was forced on slaves which may be like background or cultural legacy. Intro should maybe address what the practice is.

" Indigenous slavery was easy to establish in this area because it had not yet been outlawed; " This sentence is awkwardly worded. Spelling: The divers were kept under lock by Spaniards, who believed that if the diverse (who were mostly male) compromised their chastity, they would not be able to submerge but rather float on the water. "lock" is also awkwardly phrased.

Were these two places the only places where pearl diving happened? If not, maybe add more about what it was like in Colombia and the other places you mention. Look at your Panama section again and try to make it flow better. I think it's a little choppy right now. Overall, this is awesome! Great Job!

--Bonesb10 (talk) 15:58, 29 October 2017 (UTC)

Article Evaluation: The article remained neutral and provided a brief history of the topic. However, it was lacking in some areas, namely: - expounding on the etymology of the term's usage, specifically its Roman origins - the role of race and class position in labeling individuals as gente de razón - whether laws or social norms governed the stratification and classification of these people in that way

CaseyDukeCaseyDuke (talk) 21:29, 18 September 2017 (UTC)

What I aim to add: - The history of the gente de razón in different geographical regions across the U.S. - If the system has any modern implications/consequences on how people are classified in those territories today - The system as a smaller component in the larger sistema de castas

I will use peer-reviewed/scholarly journal articles and online books that I found that are closely related to the subject. I am primarily using Google Scholar as my search engine and might also reference some of the existing citations that the original author (s) cited.

CaseyDukeCaseyDuke (talk) 18:04, 24 September 2017 (UTC)

Reference Texts/Bibliography:

Dijk., Teun A. van. Racism and discourse in Spain and Latin America. Philadelphia: Johns Benjamins Publishers, 2005. Electronic.

Jackson, Robert H. Race, caste, and status : Indians in colonial Spanish America. Albuquerque: University of New Mexico Press, 1999. Print.

Marrero-Fente, Santa Arias and Raul. Coloniality, religion, and the law in the early Iberian world. Nashville: Vanderbilt University Press, 2014. Print.

Miranda, Gloria E. (1988). "Racial and Cultural Dimensions of "Gente de Razón" Status in Spanish and Mexican California". Southern California Quarterly. 70 (3): 265–278. doi:10.2307/41171310.

CaseyDukeCaseyDuke (talk) 19:48, 1 October 2017 (UTC)