User talk:Cassandradefalco/sandbox

Dorothy's Peer Review This article did well with being clear to the point, and the editor did a good job adding citations to validate the information. I was impressed by your in depth reflection. I would suggest that the editor add more of their personal voice to the article, and add new and engaging information, especially about how this article relates to the city of St. Petersburg. The most important thing the editor could do to this article is make more connections, from the founding of the movement to the relevance today. This is directly applicable to my article as it deals with racial inequality. I could certainly see myself citing this in my article about Enoch Douglas Davis. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dfpotts (talk • contribs) 21:12, 12 November 2018 (UTC)

Ian's Peer Review 1. I think you summarize what African Internationalism and the way this belief was derived from Marx really well. "African Internationalism is not a static theory that only refers to past conditions" is very well said. 2. I think it would be beneficial to give some examples of conditions African people are faced with today. Maybe also give reasons as to why these police forces are "illegitimate standing armies." You could reference their involvement during peaceful protests and how they use rubber bullets against defenseless activists. 3. I think it could really move the reader if images were added to this section showing the struggles that were dealt with in the past and even today. 4. There is nothing really here to add to my article but it is very interesting and this hits home for me because I am from St. Louis and witnessed the birth of the new activism that came from the tragedy of Michael Brown. I have also had the pleasure of working with the Uhuru truck at the Saturday Morning Market along with a gym owner who I volunteered for during my freshman year.

Hi! I think this addition is beneficial to the article and agree with Ian in his first point. I would add the first names to Marx and Lenin, just for a little bit of context. Additionally, the sentence where you say "capitalism was born parasitic" can be a little bit confusing without a lack of context. I would either add more information or rephrase the article (be careful about remaining unbiased here--there is a fine line). I believe that the enire article could use a few more explinatitive sentences. I would go back and re-read and ask yourself "what else would someone with no context need to know in order to understand this better". Finally I think another reference or two would sufice, just for backup. Overall I think this is great! -Haylee

Austin B Peer Review 1. Good explanation of political views and relation to other philosophies. Source on founder of movement sounds interesting. 2. Could find information of Uhuru movement involvement in politics, what sort of activism do they do? 3. More information on the history of the movement would help, anything you can find on the founder too. Maybe you could find information on what other political groups they affiliate with and what their involvement in politics is like as a whole. 4. This article doesn't relate to mine besides the mention of concentration camps relating to my article about the holocaust museum. The connection between American prison systems and concentration camps in the holocaust is interesting think about. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Aabouche (talk • contribs) 05:00, 15 November 2018 (UTC)