User talk:Cassitymega/sandbox

Peer Review:

Introduction: Along with rewording in order to get rid of quotes, you might want to think about adding a couple sentences on why the CRA was created/what is was created in regards to (trafficking, sexual exploitation, etc.) or what the problems were that allowed this act to come into place.

Background: The final sentence is here is the same as in the intro. Background might be good to go over the problems that Nigeria had faced in the previous century (1900s) with relation to child exploitation and how the government incorporated the CRA to help keep their status/make sure they were up to world standards on child rights.

I think your format is extremely well-thought out and organized. You're definitely on the right track and I think that the content section will obviously be the bulk of your work. I think while the reaction section also seems important, focusing on the content of the rights in Nigeria for children should be the top priority. Only because one might assume what the reactions could be from certain organizations that are fighting for children's rights but I think this section should still be touched upon as comparing the rights from organizations/the people of Nigeria would be important in understanding the culture of children's rights in the country. Dominic.barretto123 (talk) 22:47, 6 April 2020 (UTC)


 * @Dominic.barretto123 Thank you so much for your suggestions. I've been struggling with how to beef up the origin/background sections, and your suggestions are extremely helpful. I also think your comment about prioritization is valid. Cassitymega (talk) 17:55, 12 April 2020 (UTC)

Drew's Peer Review
I found your article topic to be very interesting, especially within the human rights world, children rights are often not considered. Given the contents section of your page, it is evident that you have a clear goal of the direction you want your article to go. Despite the lack of more written information, you are clearly on the right track for a well thought out and planned, informative article. The section I found the most interesting, and look forward to reading once the article is complete is the section on "reactions." Considering this aspect is something I didn't consider when I first read your topic, but this will definitely be a unique aspect of your article that I look forward to reading. While it is clear that you have a well thought out and planned article, I am wondering if you came across any notable child rights activists you can briefly write on, perhaps in lieu of the recent news section (if you don't find any.) However, that's only a suggestion, but I think you are definitely on the right track to publishing a great article. I look forward to reading it.

DrewTamez (talk) 23:26, 6 April 2020 (UTC)


 * @DrewTamez Thank you for your thoughtful comments about my article. I have started researching child rights activists within the country and think that information will make the article more powerful by centering the people most effected. I really appreciate your thoughtful suggestion. Now, I've just got to start writing! Cassitymega (talk) 17:55, 12 April 2020 (UTC)