User talk:Catghoyt/sandbox

The rewritten introduction paragraph sounds great and flows really well with the rest of the article. All the in-text citations seem good as well. The original page for the Crown Canyon is lacking in references, so it's awesome that you included so much up to date information.

I think the only thing you could really add to it is to link other Wikipedia articles that are related and mentioned in your article. When we really get into editing these articles, I think you could add headings about the archaeological findings in this area, how it possibly relates to other sites, etc. Ofanojk (talk) 19:40, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

Hi Cathy, this is a nice revision and extension of what is available in the article. I might reel you back in in a couple of places with the history, language and culture section. I don't know that we really need the Columbus reference for instance, nor is it clear to me that you need to go all the way back to the peopling of the Americas to provide context for this site (you might consider what is talked about on the Navajo page as a model). Then, it seems you might have stopped in the description of some of the petroglyphs? If so I would encourage you to continue adding some of that detail, but perhaps also maintaining the external link to some images of the petroglyphs too! MP Bwana Msitu (talk) 20:59, 13 October 2020 (UTC)

11-5 Review: Really great work in building this page out Cathy! It will be a great contribution and I really only have a few places I'd call your attention to: - I'm still not sure you need to go as far back as the Peopling of the Americas in the History section, but if this is something you are just inclined to do go ahead and do it - You should add a citation to the paragraph on Navajo healing in that section. - the reference to Anasazi images in the first paragraph of the next section was somewhat confusing, so a bit of extra detail letting us know what specifically is involved and why it's important would be good. - I also made one 'sight'-->'site' edit, so just do a good copy-edit before you move everything onto the main page! Best, MP Bwana Msitu (talk) 18:46, 5 November 2020 (UTC)