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How to fix my article
Kleobis_and_Biton

I came across this article very randomly, since I had already picked another article to write. However, while doing research for one of the other assignments last week, I knew that this article here needed more help than my previous one. One of the biggest problems I see in this article is that there is only one source for the entire piece and that one source comes from an amazon.com link, which is not very scholarly whatsoever. In fact, when viewing the link, it was a book that allowed for the reader to "master" Greek art within 24 hours. So, for starters, I am going to make sure that there are more sources on here that actually give more of a historical background to the piece being depicted. Also, the article seems to only have the more minimums when it comes to information on the work, so I want to add more background information with more context as to when the sculptures were found and where they are currently located. The article is a good basis, it just needs extra bits and pieces to help make it a more complete and informative work. Some of the sources I am going to use are many of the readings from Nigel Spivey, as well, as use his book Greek Sculpture, which has a lot of information on Greek works of art. I have really enjoyed doing his readings in class and bought his book online. Also, while researching I came across an article from Brown University about these particular sculptures that also had a link to another journal data base with more information. My final source, for the moment, is going to be from the Delphi Museum in Greece. Sources: "Kleobis and Biton." Kleobis and Biton. N.p., n.d. Web. Sakoulas, Thomas. "Kleobi and Biton." Delphi Museum. N.p., n.d. Web. Spivey, Nigel Jonathan. Greek Sculpture. N.p.: Cambridge UP, 2013. Print.

Catsouza (talk) 04:53, 5 October 2017 (UTC)

I think your change of choice was good, there's a lot to be done with this article especially source-wise. Your outline sounds substantial and with a much better source than amazon. I would just throw in a table of contents or separate it out so it's easier to see the outline. I like that the legend is discussed first as a way to connect the following descriptions of the sculptures something for the reader to connect them to and makes it easier to understand any iconography. Just keep on doing what you're doing Afiligenzi (talk) 20:08, 26 October 2017 (UTC) User:afiligenzi