User talk:Cawalker18/sandbox

This is the Peer Review for your first draft:

The first sentence in the opening make 1940s to be 1940's.

The second sentence in Early Colonialism, "into Abeokuta to negotiate treaties"

Third sentence Early Colonialism: Choose treaty or agreement, comma before quote and citation after, What was the name of the treaty? What was the political crisis in 1897?

More corrections in that section: "Roads and markets, while producing and exporting several..." "cocoa. For regional economy exporting: hols" "It also imported" awk, maybe They or EUG?

Origins of Taxation sentence 5 Change "After a while" to a single word... eventually, ultimately, etc. "colonial officials"

More changes to this section "Rather this model was informed"...remove very much Again comma before quote and citation after. Your quotes are very long, consider shortening

You need a Reference section

Good Luck!

--Allycoughlan (talk) 20:51, 9 March 2019 (UTC)

Note to peer editors
Everything in bold was written by me, and everything that has been italicized is a quote that was not cited so I do not know where it came from. It's like that so that I can either remove it and rework the section, or find the source. Also, this is not the entire page. There is a reference section; it's on the actual page. Cawalker18 (talk) 18:56, 14 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review
I think that the last sentence of the origins section is a little awkward with structural and collections. I agree with the first review about the into part, and maybe just check for grammatical changes from the original text. More citations in the text would be useful to verify the information.

Overall, I think you have a really good start, there are just a few minor grammar changes and things like that :) Annamberg07 (talk) 16:19, 15 March 2019 (UTC)