User talk:Caylacrowder/sandbox

Peer Review:

Introduction: Your intro paragraph was good; it covered important information without repeating facts from the rest of the article.

Organization: Your draft is really well organized which made it easy to follow. Did he have any exhibitions? If so maybe consider adding a section on that in the form of a chronological list? The last three sections cover his body of work and the way that they are divided up reads well, but maybe include years with them. Maybe have a section on how the works were received? I don’t know if it’s necessary to include but it was something that I was wondering when I read the article since his work covered controversial topics. Maybe consider having a section on influences?

Balance: All of your sections seem pretty balanced and each one seems to have a strong start.

Neutrality: The article on the whole seemed very neutral and you did a good job of presenting facts without bias. One sentence that stood out to me as maybe not as neutral as it could be was the last sentence in the aesthetic section. Also, I think the sentence would need a semi colon instead of a comma since it’s two independent clauses, and “its” would need an apostrophe. But since this is a draft those probably aren’t too important right now.

Overall I think you have a really strong beginning to your article and it was interesting and engaging to read! Egibbon120 (talk) 16:42, 9 March 2019 (UTC)Egibbon