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@Ccharlt1 here is what you submitted:

Neo-Liberalism
Neo-liberalism includes deregulation, free market capitalism, and aims at reducing government spending. These Neo-liberal policies greatly affect environmental sociology. Since Neo-liberalism includes deregulation and essentially less government involvement, this leads to the commodification and privatization of unowned, state-owned, or common property resources. This results in payments for environmental services; deregulation and cuts in public expenditure for environmental management; the opening up of trade and investment; and transfer of environmental management to local or nongovernmental institutions. The privatization of these resources have impacts on society, the economy, and to the environment. An example that has greatly affected society is the privatization of water.

Comments below:


 * 1) Why did you not link to the Neoliberalism article?
 * 2) The article that you cite is excellent, but keep in mind that the assessments that it makes are specific to the environment in Latin America.
 * 3) Your first sentence seems like an apt summary of the second sentence on Liverman and Vilas (2006:328). You should therefore cite it accordingly: Neo-liberalism includes deregulation, free market capitalism, and aims at reducing government spending.
 * 4) You can cite plenty of papers that can attest that neoliberal policies greatly affect the environment, but environmental sociology itself is the study of the interaction of humans with nature. Therefore, that sentence does not make sense.
 * 5) The following sentences, "the privatization and commodification of unowned, state-owned, or common property resources" and "This results in payments for environmental services; deregulation and cuts in public expenditure for environmental management; the opening up of trade and investment; and transfer of environmental management to local or nongovernmental institutions," are plagiarized. Even though you cited the article, you did not modify the wording. This is a direct violation of the Wikipedia class project agreement. Rewrite those two sentences into your own words and combined with your first sentence (properly cited), you've got a solid contribution.
 * 6) The last sentence seems vague and disconnected to the rest of the paragraph. Either remove it or cite it.

ImagineWorldPeace (talk) 05:15, 17 December 2022 (UTC)

ImagineWorldPeace (talk) 05:15, 17 December 2022 (UTC)