User talk:Ccroninv ucb/sandbox

Zara's Peer Review
The lead section of this article is great! It's direct and explanatory without being excessively long or offering frivolous details. The background section does a good job of expanding on the lead section while offering more depth, however when you cit Myriam Denov, it would be useful to include a few words regarding who she is/why her opinion matters. Additionally, when you discuss the presence of small girls within the militaries, it might be better to just say they were subjected to brutal sexual violence as opposed to explicitly saying they were subjected to rape or gang rape, which is certainly more difficult for readers to digest. I think you do a great job of explaining the socio-economic circumstances that led to child soldiers becoming so pervasive but I think you could improve this section by further discussing what recruitment tactics looked like, where they occurred, and how their membership was retained. I think the sections detailing organizations facilitating integration are a little longer than necessary and I think they could be more clearly structured. You discuss what DDR is within the first subcategory but later devote an entire section to it. I think either structuring it so the DDR method comes before facilitating organizations or maybe removing mentions of the method from previous sections would make this easier for readers to digest. I think the article is well organized, with the exception of the two aforementioned suggestions. I think the most important thing that can be done to improve the article is to provide more information regarding what the experience of child solders was like while they were active combatants because your article seems to focus more on how they got into the situation and how they healed after. As a reader, I would love to hear more about the psychological impacts on child soldiers and whether or not the prolific use of child soldiers during this war later resulted in cultural changes. --Zara.and (talk) 06:23, 7 April 2019 (UTC)Zara