User talk:Celiayangyy/2017sandbox

Review from Graeme Bartlett
Hello Celiayangyy

I see that your topic is North China Craton, which already has an article. This means that you are doing something different to the others. I expect you will be replacing the content with what you wrote when it goes live. You may actually find material from the old article that could be useful. However the lack of references is a problem! Your map makes it look as though the craton is entirely within the borders of China, yet the text also says its in North Korea. Also the old article says its in Mongolia too, and has a larger area.

Please rewrite your dot points into complete sentences. They actually do not need much modification. I hope you can get the text size of your page up to 19000 characters, so it can be eligible for DYK.

For File:Sandstone xenolith Fairlee Pluton.jpg, this is not from the North China Craton. It would be far better to get a picture of a xenolith from the North China Craton, even if it is less impressive in size! Similarly File:Jaspilite banded iron formation, Soudan Underground State Park.jpg is American and should not be on your page. Lastly is File:NevadiaSp.jpg from the craton? I cannot tell where this species comes from by reading the description. The other pictures and diagrams look to be suitable.

Graeme Bartlett (talk) 22:21, 15 October 2017 (UTC)

Feedback from leonkh
1. Can provide more details on stratigraphy

A log or diagram can be shown the generally stratigraphy of the formation in some of the area

2. can provide more details on fossil record

More examples of fossils and their ages and indication or importance can be added

3. The phanerzoic history can be divided into more detailed period if available

Review by Jupiter
Hi Celiayangyy.

Your page gives a clear and detailed description of North China Craton Geology. Clear structure and simple wordings makes your page easy to understand and suitable for high school level. Good use of real pictures to make your page more lively with real life examples, and also geological diagrams to shown the geological setting.

Here are some suggestions:

1. For the overlapping with North China Craton, maybe you can make your page Geology of North China Craton. I think your recent content is enough to develop a separate page, with detailed description in Tectonic Evolution, Mineral Resources and Biostratigraphy. If you want to keep the part of "Geography of North China Craton", you may want to add the North China Craton as the main article, as North China Craton are mainly focused on geography. You may also want to focus more on the mineral resource part if you want to make your page different from the exiting page.

2. For the "Map" (Area of North China Craton) at the beginning, you may want to make it more understandable by adding the scale, north arrow and the Southeast coastal line. Labeling is also important (I know you outline the area of China and North China Craton, but what is the red cross representing?). You may want to make use a real map as a base map to reconstruct your own. Some copyright-free images or maps of China may be a good base map.

3. Also, I found that you further divided your " Mineral Deposits" section into different types of minerals, such as "Cu-Zn deposits", "Banded Iron Formation (BIFs)" and "REE" under each geological time subsections. It is a good thing, as readers reading this section may be more interested to find a particular resource or a list of resource from this area, instead of following the time scale. You may also want to put it as sub-subsection as well, so it can be shown clearly on the content list, as followed:

Cu-Zn deposits
Generally, I think your page is informative with detailed description and clear outline. You may want to think of changing your topic to avoid overlapping with an exiting wiki page with the exiting content. Also, a better map showing the North China Craton will be essential to present the topic at the beginning. Jupmira104(talk)

Feedback from dinohk
1. For the biostratigraphy part I would suggest including more links to the specific trilobite taxa you mentioned. Are there only trilobites or are other fossils found there as well? I would go into a little more detail.

2. I think it would make it easier for the reader if you list the year next to each geological period for the sub-sections, for example: Phanerozoic History (541-0 mya), especially for readers that aren't familiar with geological periods.

3. For the mineral deposits sections it might be better to have subsections of each resource type rather than time period, then break down for each type when and how it was deposited. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dinohk (talk • contribs) 02:55, 23 October 2017 (UTC)

Feedback from eunicecyl
Hi Celiayangyy

I think its a nice page with interesting info. yet here are some suggestions.

1. I think it would be nice to add a figure of the overview north china craton boundary, listing each sections out (e.g. the location Tan Lu fault) 2. U might want to elaborate a bit on the formation system of Cu-Zn deposits? How is it different from modern rift systems? 3. U might consider adding in few more links about the biostratigraphy and a diagram of the stratigraphy of North China Craton?

Fighting :)