User talk:Celsisa

YOU HAVE DECIDED TO WORK ON THE TERM PAPERRJBazell (talk) 20:06, 2 April 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
I'm really glad that you chose to improve the Lumpectomy page, I remember it being really sparse and I can tell you've already made really big content improvements on the article. I think the sections you added are extremely helpful, but it might be a good idea to make broad section with subtopics. For example, history should be a broad topic and then the subtopics would be the developments by each time period. You have really good broad topics right now, and I think your article would be really strengthened if you try to divide these into smaller fragments for fluidity and cohesion. I also think it would be a good idea for you to make use of Wikipedia's ability to link to other articles since you refer to many other related concepts that might be helpful for a reader, like ductal carcinoma, the NCCN, etc. I would love to see the history section be expanded as well as the modern use of lumpectomies. The information that you've added this far seems to be really good quality content, so I think as long as you work on involving more organization and more information, your article is going to turn out to be fantastic. Also look out to make sure that each paragraph of yours ends with a citation. As of right now, this is a great article that I found to be a lot more insightful and informative than the original state of the article, I'm excited to see where you take this!

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Feedback
Hi. I'm a little concerned about the sources you used in your draft. Don't forget that biomedical context is subject to very specific sourcing requirements. Your goal should be recent review articles - anything more than five years old is probably too old. You should have access to the best peer-reviewed journals through your library - use them. Don't rely on websites that don't give information about authorship, or how old they are, or whether they were subject to peer review.

You also need to make sure that your sources support the statements they are being used to support. For example, the statement

uses two supporting sources. The first of these is a biography of Fisher. Not only does it not support the statements made in the sentence, it also has the appearance of being a profile submitted by Fisher himself. It probably isn't sufficiently independent to be used as a reliable source. The second one is a paper co-authored by Fisher himself. This isn't a secondary source. You can't use someone's own work to comment on the significance of their own work. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:09, 13 March 2018 (UTC)