User talk:CertainCilantro/sandbox

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1. First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?
 * I like that the structure gets into each particular type! I also like the logic of discussing the historical background as well as contemporary use.

2. What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?
 * I think you might want to organize the structure of the wood lath section more clearly. It jumps back and forth between history, present use, and technical information right now. Pick an order, and stick to it across all sections (not sure if you wrote this or not or if it's within your chosen purview to edit this).
 * In the keys section, define the term before you discuss why it's important.
 * You might not want to discuss ways to avoid failure in the failure section? Maybe make another section on how to avoid failure?

3. What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?
 * Structural clarity. Make the changes above, and you might also want to collapse the metal, wood, etc. sections into a single section called "Variations" or "Types of Lath."

4. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know!
 * I so appreciated that this article is in lay-person language. Was it already, or did you have to make changes? Mine is very technical, and I'm not sure the extent to which I am qualified to change it since I don't understand what it's talking about half the time...

Tree Street Resident (talk) 00:00, 21 November 2017 (UTC)

Instructor comments
It was challenging to discern your edits from the original article; be careful in copying them into Wikipedia mainspace. You've made some good additions, and I agree with your peer reviewer's comments, particularly those about organization. In addition, please look into whether any of the additional sources that you've identified could help respond to the instances of Template:Citation needed.

11:25, 27 November 2017 (UTC)