User talk:Ch8008766

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Trish Dolman
Minor revisions necessary. Chronophoto (talk) 15:35, 22 October 2019 (UTC)
 * You have chosen an interesting filmmaker!
 * Several of the sources are not independent, so I recommend adding at least one or two additional reliable and independent secondary sources.
 * The prose about her career also feels a little thin. See if you can find more information. You can also add quotes from her talking about her career.
 * Add more footnotes to the text, because it’s not always clear where your information is coming to.
 * Change the filmography to a table with more information about Dolman’s role on these films. You may also want to include the director and production company.
 * The discussion of the panel was confusing. Was this an event that happened or a continuing thing?

Edit suggestions
Hi there, I have a few notes that I believe will help the flow of your article.

•	The first sentence of your Career section is nearly identical to the closing sentence of your opening paragraph, the repetition distracts from the topic.

•	I believe that when first discussing Christine Haebler joining Screen Siren Pictures, it would be best to flip the sentence, aka. “Screen Siren Pictures added Christine Haebler as a producer partner in 2009” SSP is the focus of this paragraph, and this is the first mention of Haebler in the article, it helps the reader to understand why she is relevant to Dolman.

•	“Company's that Dolman has directed and produced for include:” Should be changed to “Companies that Dolman has directed and produced for include:”

•	Your citation for National Dream Reel West is used frequently, however as there is no listed author, publisher etc. the source is incredibly hard to verify, more information within the source would be beneficial

•	Awards and Honours should likely be a bullet list or a table, as is none of the sentences directly relate to one another. I really like the amount of information you have, and especially how it shows how Dolman’s career has progressed.

SpicyHotChocolate (talk) 15:50, 6 November 2019 (UTC)