User talk:Charco0917/sandbox

In general, I think this page is a good expansion of the original article, but there is some work to do. The page can benefit from a more general discussion of living polymerizations for non-experts. The text can be more suited for a non-expert by describing the advantages, disadvantages, and applications of each living polymerization. I think the Characteristics section is a good start for making the Wikipedia accessible to non-experts, and these types of characteristics should also be pointed out for each of the living polymerizations. There is an overwhelming amount of journal sources, and some more reviews and books should be added. You can find several books online that provides more general information, one that I found useful that was not used as a reference on the Wiki page is called Controlled and Living Polymerizations: From Mechanisms to Applications (Online ISBN: 9783527629091). Lastly, it needs to be proofread. Most of the introduction paragraph was untouched from the original page, which is fine since the intro paragraph was already clearly written and accessible to non-experts. However, the introduction can be significantly expanded. One sentence was added explaining why living polymerizations are desirable; this sentence can be expanded on by providing an example. Although there is a separate application section, it would be helpful to name some industrial examples right away in the intro.

Some of the introduction was moved into its own History section. I think this is a great idea, but this section needs improvement. It becomes less accessible for non-experts and more of a list polymerization reactions. The History section would be more accessible for non-experts if the authors worded this section more in terms of the development of living polymerizations. Mainly answer the question of why these named reactions are important to the development of living polymerizations.

Another thing you might want to include in the introduction is to establish the difference between controlled and living polymerizations. When you search for controlled polymerizations on Wikipedia, you are redirected to living polymerization articles. It’s stated later in the article that the difference is debatable, and I think this could be stated right away in the introduction. Stating this right away would help clarify some of the sections that aren’t technically considered living and a few sentences establishing the difference in the introduction would be helpful to readers searching for controlled polymerizations.

The sections under Living Polymerization Techniques and Applications were significantly expanded on from the original article. Ring-opening, free radical, and catalyst-transfer are all well done sections that seem like an appropriate summary for Wikipedia. There are a few sections that can be re-written in more general terms to be more accessible to non-experts. First, the section on alpha-olefins has a lot of scientific terminology without links or pictures. A non-expert may not know what PE and PP stand for. A non-expert probably won’t understand why chelate initiators have high potential for living polymerization of alpha olefins. The other section that needs work is group-transfer polymerization. It seems as though Ziegler-Natta and group transfer were combined from the original article but neither section was altered. This section could benefit from a more general discussion describing these types of living polymerizations.

The important terms and concepts are linked to their respective Wikipedia pages, and the authors also included some good external links. However, there are some broken links (alpha-olefins, Kumada Coupling, and step-growth are just the ones I caught). All of the examples seem appropriate, however, the organization is slightly confusing. It is not clear why living ring-opening metathesis polymerization is under the category of anionic polymerization. There are pages for some of the categories you talk about, like Living Anionic Polymerization and Living Free-Radical Polymerization, but I think your page is a good, complimentary summary of these pages.

The figures are well made. The only one I would edit is the large mechanism under catalyst-transfer. Maybe breaking it up into two separate pictures would help. Currently, it is hard to follow what is going on in the picture and the description in the text. I also think figures should be added to Living alpha-polymerization, and living group polymerizations. Otherwise, I thought the animation describing the characteristics of living polymerization was pretty clever and helps describe the ideas, the pictures in the applications section are well done, and as far as I can tell the ChemDraw structures are chemically accurate, however, some of the atom labels are small and difficult to read. Iriidium (talk) 03:35, 28 February 2014 (UTC)

Peer Review of Living Polymerization Wikipedia Page

Content: I really like the breakdown of your sections and you definitely did a lot of great work adding to your page. Your introduction looks good, but I feel like more could be added to help someone who has never heard of living polymerizations to understand exactly what they are and how they are different from other types of polymerizations. This would also add/update the introduction section a bit more in terms of the content and its ability to help the reader understand the basics of living polymerizations. In the history section you might discuss more recent advances after 1979 as well as go a little deeper into what the relevance of those advances are. In addition, I notice that you have a few places in your page where you left brackets or things that you might have been using as a place holder, but forgot to delete. Also in the history section you use the term "livingness," I'm not sure if this is the right was to get across the fact that there are several methods that exist which make Ziegler-Natta polymerization living. I also feel like people who don't know anything about living polymerizations might get confused when you jump into characteristics after the introduction. Is there any way to put a little bit of general information about the mechanism of living polymerization and some basic information first? On the other hand, the characteristics section does a great job at describing the benefits of living polymerizations. You should delete the question mark at the end of the section titled "Living group-transfer polymerization?". Some of your links are red because they are not actual wiki pages, or you typed it in wrong when trying to link the page, you should go back and check those. The examples you give a good. Overall I feel like the page contains great information especially in the applications and techniques sections.

Figures: I really like how some of your figures are interactive. All of your figures look good, but I would be careful with making figures hard to read or interpret. Also, some of your figures could be smaller and aligned better (I'm referring to the second figure in the "Low dispersity" section).

References: You have extensive references in your page, much more than the page has currently. On the other hand, I would try and add more references that are actually attainable by the Wiki audience, like books.

Overall Presentation: Overall, the page is greatly improved when compared to the current page. Content is well described and written, with the exception of a few places that could use more elaboration or explanation. Figures are good, especially the interactive figures, but the alignment and size of some can be adjusted to make them more pleasing to the eye. Other than that, I think your references are great but could use a few more non-journal sources that Wiki readers can access.

Thanks :-) Schrodingerscat101 (talk) Schrodingerscat101 (talk) 04:31, 28 February 2014 (UTC)

Instructor Comments
The peer reviewers did an excellent job pointing out a lot of the places where further editing is needed. I would eliminate the initiation sequence in the catalyst-transfer polycondensation section since this is specific to one type of catalyst (LnNiCl2), which has been largely replaced now. I am also not sure what the self-healing example adds to the page. Or at least, the connection to living polymerizations was not abundantly clear. Otherwise, nice job! UMChemProfessor (talk) 03:30, 3 March 2014 (UTC)

Suggestions from ChemLibrarian
A few suggestions here.

ChemLibrarian (talk) 16:40, 3 March 2014 (UTC)
 * The quote box for "IUPAC definition" looks a little awkward in terms of location. Please see this page Template:Quote box to change the wrapping and location of the quote box to make the article flow better.
 * Don't forget your (add reference?) note in the first paragraph.
 * Nice work with the animation. But please edit the location and size of the images to make the texts wrapped nicer around them. See Picture tutorial for tips on doing it.
 * There are several errors in your reference list. Mostly caused by author names. If you were using the template to insert the references, when there are multiple authors, just input all of them into the Coauthor field and do not use the First name and Last name fields. That may help.

Response to reviewers
Thank you for taking the time to review our Wikipedia page we have taken the comments into consideration when editing our page.

Response to Iriidium
We attempted to point out some of the characteristics of living polymerization in the examples given particularly in the alpha olefin section. These changes were based on your comments about making the alpha olefin section more accessible to the Wikipedia readers. As for the comment on the references, we added mainly review articles and books to the reference list and many of the journal articles were copied over from the already existing page. We addressed your comment comment about making the introduction more clear by elaborating on the difference between living and non-living polymerization as well as living vs controlled polymerization. However we felt that significantly expanding on the introduction with examples would make it too long. We agreed with your comment on reorganizing and expanding upon the history and as a result the history section was reorganized and content was added. The alpha olefin section was expanded on by adding images and trying to explain why the chelate initiators have a high potential for living polymerization. We also fixed the issue you mentioned about ROMP by removing it from anionic polymerization and making ROMP its own section since it can be either anionic or cationic. We also fixed the CTP image by eliminating the initiation step in order to make the image more clear. Thanks Charco0917 (talk)

Response to Schrodingerscat101
Thank you for your comments regarding our sandbox page. We attempted to make the definition of living polymerization (LP) more clear for new readers by elaborating on the differences of LP with non-LP. As for your comment about including more detailed and recent examples in the history section, we organized the section but did not add more recent examples since the histroy of LP was not the main focus of our page. We have realigned and made our images more easy to interpret and the broken links were fixed. Many of our references are available through google books, public content or are major reviews in the field. Thanks Charco0917 (talk)

Response to UMChemProfessor
Thanks for taking the time to review our page. We added a additional explanation to the self-healing polymer section and how it relates to living polymers. In addition we removed the initiation step from the CTP mechanism in order to make it more clear to understand. Thanks Charco0917 (talk)

Response to ChemLibrarian
Thank you for your comments on our page. The reference errors were fixed and some of the images were re-sized/re-positioned to make the text wrap around the figures better. Thanks Charco0917 (talk)