User talk:Charfriedman/sandbox

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General info Charfriedman User:Charfriedman/sandbox Lead

Guiding questions:

The lead includes information that summarizes the Mihrab fairly well. Yes, it does address the fact that Mihrabs will be the subject of the article, it does, however, include a judgment statement claiming that "Mihrab is the most important part of a mosque." I'm not completely sure if that should be the first sentence. I think this person is going to cover various examples of Mihrabs in different Mosques but they don't really clarify that in the lead. There is not much of the article written but they do address the features of a Mihrab. The lead is concise. Lead evaluation Content

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The content is pretty valuable because adding examples of Mihrabs would be important to show what they look like and apply visuals. Yes, it is up-to-date. because they used more recent sources. They have not filled out all of the locations and it seems like they are planning on adding more. Content evaluation Tone and Balance

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The first sentence begins with a statement that Mihrabs are the most important part of a Mosque and I thought that was a little opinionated and non-biased. Other than that the rest of the article is pretty neutral. The first sentence but it isn't malicious or anything it just is more opinionated than what should be on a Wikipedia page. Not particularly no. No, it just emphasizes the importance of the Mihrab which is good. Tone and balance evaluation Sources and References

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All three of their sources back their information up. They are, one is even a book that has a solid amount of information. The book source is from 1996, another source is from 2008, and the other is a newly updated website that is timely and modern. All three links work. Sources and references evaluation Organization

Guiding questions:

Their statements are very concise and to the point. There are minimal grammatical errors. The introduction is a solid layout further followed by sections of each location. Those sections are not complete however. Organization evaluation Images and Media

Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

No, it does not. There are no images included in their sandbox. No image in their sandbox. No images yet to be laid out. Images and media evaluation For New Articles Only

If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.

Yes, it does match the notability requirements. There aren't too many sources but they are various forms that can be analyzed. For example, one is a book, and two are unique styles of websites. Not really. It has paragraphs and properly done sources but there are no unique infoboxes and images. The title is formatted correctly No, it does not. New Article Evaluation Overall impressions

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I think the information they have presented has the potential to impact the article in a positive way, it just needs to be beefed up more. The really strong introduction that lays out what they are trying to say about Mihrabs very well. Add photos, layout more sections (i.e., a title for the locations), and finish what they were going to say. Overall evaluation

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Prof. Neumeier comments
Hi Charlotte, a few comments:

--In general, I would say this is an excellent start. I am glad to see that you tracked down the book by Flood. The two major things to look into for revisions is making sure your footnotes are fixed (see below), and to try to incorporate information from the Heba Mostafa article that we read at the beginning of this course.

--name the author in footnote 1 & 3 (and page number for the Khoury article)

--Citations 4 & 5 need to be fixed, it just takes you to the TU portal, the link doesn't work and I do not understand what source you are citing: "Shibboleth Authentication Request".

And some edits to your text:

--"Mihrab's are a relevant part" TO "Mihrabs" (remove apostrophe)

--"Since they are used for praying" TO "Since they are used to indicate the direction for prayer"

--"linear patters, or calligraphy" TO "linear patterns, or calligraphy"

--"impression for the aesthetic of mihrab's," (remove apostrophe in mihrabs)

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