User talk:Charliebelkowitz/sandbox

1. First, what does the article-draft do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?

I think that you add some information that is very valuable to this article. I would expand more on the sections on how advertising has affected American Consumption.

2. Are there sections in the article that seem unnecessary? Is anything off-topic? The focus is clear and I think it could be supplemented with more detail.

3. Does the article focus too much on negative or positive information? Explain.

The articles is actually quite neutral and doesn't have any persuasive content. The only thing that adds a hint of bias is the word "controversially" in Food Photography. Perhaps consider another word that isn't so opionion base,

Remember, neutral doesn't mean "the best positive light" or "the worst, most critical light." It means a clear reflection of various aspects of a topic.

4. Does the article draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view?Are most statements in the article connected to a reliable source, such as textbooks and journal articles? Or do they rely on blogs or self-published authors?

The sources are reliable and netural. I think especially for these subjects it may be considered to add more sources so that readers can understand more about the content.

5. Are there any changes you would suggest the author apply to the article? Why?

I would add different means of media. Especially for the Food Photography section it would be great to add some photos.

6. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know!

I think the clear and concise writing is great, and I might want to reconsider language choice for my writing.

LuisLaguilar11 (talk) 14:51, 29 October 2019 (UTC)